tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post1019427183624859605..comments2023-10-21T04:55:36.672-04:00Comments on Urbanality: Impulse ControlSteven Marty Granthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12025403178005766557noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post-33687569949284214542011-08-20T18:59:41.427-04:002011-08-20T18:59:41.427-04:00Intense and erotic poem.
A perfect piece of inspi...Intense and erotic poem. <br />A perfect piece of inspiration for a story. <br />edenEden Bayleehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08043540142363106345noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post-53065786409176987722011-08-12T19:52:17.891-04:002011-08-12T19:52:17.891-04:00Damn I love your poetry its weird I feel like your...Damn I love your poetry its weird I feel like your narrating my own lifeAmy everettnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post-41282678314565132172011-08-11T11:47:12.158-04:002011-08-11T11:47:12.158-04:00Your are the master of poetic narrative. This is j...Your are the master of poetic narrative. This is just another proof of that assertion. I thorougly enjoy reading your poetic narratives. If you are not a novelist, what are you waiting for my friend.emmett wheatfallhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07466994239329611740noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post-39270961226404903272011-03-08T16:55:03.758-05:002011-03-08T16:55:03.758-05:00Love Bukowski/"Barfly" - the work suits ...Love Bukowski/"Barfly" - the work suits the picture/author, in intent, execution, excellence.Steve Isaakhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07162341357622058518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post-38710944377867780922011-03-05T00:30:50.356-05:002011-03-05T00:30:50.356-05:00Wow, I agree with Claudia, very exquisitely painte...Wow, I agree with Claudia, very exquisitely painted... Wet scotch...<br />lovely post...<br /><br />ॐ नमः शिवाय<br />Om Namah Shivaya<br />http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/03/whispers-winter-dew.html<br />Twitter @VerseEveryDayShashidhar Sharmahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10752054354309206121noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post-2272677900091077302011-03-03T20:06:32.986-05:002011-03-03T20:06:32.986-05:00You certainly got the Bukowski thing going on here...You certainly got the Bukowski thing going on here. Very urban, hard, and weary as was said before. Burn out takes many forms, for sure.Beachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post-46146214332068422362011-03-02T19:19:14.027-05:002011-03-02T19:19:14.027-05:00The image certainly is pertinent, as the Barflies ...The image certainly is pertinent, as the <i>Barflies</i> vibe in this piece has already been commented upon several times. The matter-of-fact (if not outright weary) tone works well here: no happy endings, no uplifting messages, just another damn drink.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post-56134473563800422312011-03-02T17:11:07.730-05:002011-03-02T17:11:07.730-05:00o i wonder who among us hasn't been there, old...o i wonder who among us hasn't been there, old bar fly here. love the photo. xjJenne' R. Andrews https://www.blogger.com/profile/15744946229300234443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post-20521827872852250762011-03-02T16:15:59.320-05:002011-03-02T16:15:59.320-05:00brilliant....brilliant....Marshyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08029232967141290634noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post-61517436443594783682011-03-02T15:58:38.030-05:002011-03-02T15:58:38.030-05:00yes I agree with the other comments I too loved th...yes I agree with the other comments I too loved the line the wetness of her lips mix with scotch. Love this very sexy.Warcommanderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09099325530039197057noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post-30429098059493984302011-03-02T13:03:48.414-05:002011-03-02T13:03:48.414-05:00The image is from Barfly, right? I like the Bukows...The image is from Barfly, right? I like the Bukowski-ness of this one!Timoteohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08351410966396854582noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post-79947368795455794872011-03-02T10:47:28.660-05:002011-03-02T10:47:28.660-05:00Amy Sprague's got it right: this is grungy. It...Amy Sprague's got it right: this is grungy. It leaves you with that feel. It's morning here, a Wednesday morning, I'm sitting in my robe with coffee but your poem makes me think I can smell stale cigarettes, and hangover breath, my head hurts a bit, and there's a weight on my chest.Sarahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12485578707356486342noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post-48978695823276936352011-03-02T00:17:26.464-05:002011-03-02T00:17:26.464-05:00back again. I had to read it a third time, I like...back again. I had to read it a third time, I like it that muchAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post-63159840774892001122011-03-01T23:50:47.068-05:002011-03-01T23:50:47.068-05:00this is an excellent one-shot. I absolutely loved...this is an excellent one-shot. I absolutely loved the grungy, realistic feel of it, the truth in it--raw and realistic. Do you write stories as well? You're voice is impeccable.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post-58422412978771098282011-03-01T22:48:35.664-05:002011-03-01T22:48:35.664-05:00nice capture of a rather sensual moment...i dont k...nice capture of a rather sensual moment...i dont know if i would have remembered the tab...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post-80708805684117338692011-03-01T21:50:08.683-05:002011-03-01T21:50:08.683-05:00You set the scene perfectly, and then keep the sto...You set the scene perfectly, and then keep the story moving straight to that end point. Lost souls, holding on to human touch and contact. Great poem.Glynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10802111972232088511noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post-41144557540623840872011-03-01T21:17:42.466-05:002011-03-01T21:17:42.466-05:00This is a great poem. Love the word choice and ima...This is a great poem. Love the word choice and imagery throughout.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post-83491650524613804122011-02-23T18:23:54.993-05:002011-02-23T18:23:54.993-05:00I re-read this today, and I really feel it this ti...I re-read this today, and I really feel it this time. Especially "swallowed like it was pride" I dug.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post-50789282483226333412011-02-09T16:12:48.208-05:002011-02-09T16:12:48.208-05:00I think "luminous" and "glow" ...I think "luminous" and "glow" are a bit redundant. Some good images but this could probably be tightened. Make it a movie and let the pictures do the talking, you know?Valeriehttp://candleinsunshine.com/asthemoonclimbs/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post-47586395710248941562011-02-05T16:36:29.972-05:002011-02-05T16:36:29.972-05:00..I noticed the wetness on her lips
and wondered h.....I noticed the wetness on her lips<br />and wondered how it would mix<br />with my scotch... this is the most erotic line i've read in a while.<br />really like this poem - the only thing that confuses me a bit - they moved back inside for a drink and then he moves back inside to close out the tab..maybe you used the "back inside" on purpose twice?<br />also like the swallowed like regret and the well-dressed exhale of smokeClaudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.com