tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post2520172309206526032..comments2023-10-21T04:55:36.672-04:00Comments on Urbanality: TempestSteven Marty Granthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12025403178005766557noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post-10407556779708022232013-07-11T21:08:01.262-04:002013-07-11T21:08:01.262-04:00I love the way you ended this, a brilliant use of ...I love the way you ended this, a brilliant use of metaphor.mrs mediocrityhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01021079985184737831noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post-46662342556984874812013-07-10T23:48:00.169-04:002013-07-10T23:48:00.169-04:00love the images, conversation and mood you create....love the images, conversation and mood you create...ha..better to have that umbrella ready, you never know...smiles...titans tossing trash cans in the<br />alleyways of heaven...so cool....Claudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post-30825762932950845022013-07-10T16:51:35.255-04:002013-07-10T16:51:35.255-04:00The freshness of Colorado and the swelter of New Y...The freshness of Colorado and the swelter of New York in August - can be the condition of the heart as well. Very good.Mystic_Momhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00099062213372011260noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post-89311085174591427132013-07-10T00:03:19.323-04:002013-07-10T00:03:19.323-04:00she's young, she said,
but look at me,
I have ...she's young, she said,<br />but look at me,<br />I have pretty ankles,<br />and look at my wrists, I have pretty<br />wrists<br />o my god,<br />I thought it was all working,<br />and now it's her again,<br />every time she phones you go crazy,<br />you told me it was over<br />you told me it was finished,<br />listen, I've lived long enough to become a <br />good woman,<br />why do you need a bad woman?<br />you need to be tortured, don't you?<br />you think life is rotten if somebody treats you<br />rotten it all fits,<br />doesn't it?<br />tell me, is that it? do you want to be treated like a <br />piece of shit?<br />and my son, my son was going to meet you.<br />I told my son<br />and I dropped all my lovers.<br />I stood up in a cafe and screamed<br />I'M IN LOVE,<br />and now you've made a fool of me. . .<br />I'm sorry, I said, I'm really sorry.<br />hold me, she said, will you please hold me?<br />I've never been in one of these things before, I said,<br />these triangles. . .<br />she got up and lit a cigarette, she was trembling all <br />over.she paced up and down,wild and crazy.she had<br />a small body.her arms were thin,very thin and when<br />she screamed and started beating me I held her<br />wrists and then I got it through the eyes:hatred,<br />centuries deep and true.I was wrong and graceless and<br />sick.all the things I had learned had been wasted.<br />there was no creature living as foul as I <br />and all my poems were<br />false.<br /><br />By -CB<br />Warcommanderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09099325530039197057noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post-2829693640431207102013-07-09T21:28:26.567-04:002013-07-09T21:28:26.567-04:00This is just so lovely! I loved everything aabout ...This is just so lovely! I loved everything aabout it!Audrey Howitt aka Divaloungerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06854425983822589062noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post-11743914899703603142013-07-09T20:27:13.702-04:002013-07-09T20:27:13.702-04:00"Thunder rattled with a sound
best described ..."Thunder rattled with a sound<br />best described as titans tossing trash cans in the<br />alleyways of heaven."<br />This was my favorite line !!<br />Everything bigger in big sky country, been to Colorado a few times myself and natural beauty is its #1 asset !!<br />P.S.had a real difficult time proving i was not a robot !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post-10919386448600346582013-07-09T18:42:35.935-04:002013-07-09T18:42:35.935-04:00What a lovely prose poem. Nicely done especially t...What a lovely prose poem. Nicely done especially the denouement at the end.>KBAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post-46902207496555177172013-07-09T16:49:58.907-04:002013-07-09T16:49:58.907-04:00Oh, this is glorious! I can feel the cooling off a...Oh, this is glorious! I can feel the cooling off and the raindrops on my skin. And I do love the weather/climate metaphor.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post-88790058467833186582013-07-09T15:51:59.802-04:002013-07-09T15:51:59.802-04:00I love the description of weather in Colorado. I w...I love the description of weather in Colorado. I was there a couple of years ago and the afternoon thunderstorms are so impressive,<br /><br />Love how you mingle the nature with the mood in the relationship. <br /><br />and " titans tossing trash cans in the<br />alleyways of heaven" is such a cool descriptionbrudberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12563403553536472377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-387663636127765777.post-88019282803715711692013-07-09T15:35:58.277-04:002013-07-09T15:35:58.277-04:00ah that storm can turn at any moment...especially ...ah that storm can turn at any moment...especially depending on how you answer that question, just saying...ha...and i would wait til you got off the road before answering...or were going below interstate speeds....Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.com