ee BukowskiI pick-
ed
****up
thisextordinarywoman
(at
the track)
She
was new
toall
*****this bet
ting ******the ponies
****shit
and so (by
the
way)
impressed she was
with my
***********prowess
that
*****she
gave me
*****allofher;
money which I
lost
as quick
ly
as
I had
my own
SMG
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38 comments:
Love it! Cool homage combining two gigantic poetic influences. Thanks for the creative One Shot!
I missed the photo on the lft -- as I rerad it I thought this reminded me of e e cummings -- and then Adam's note filled the gap. I really like this.
Love it...all of it..great read and write...bkm
Very cool poem combining the two poets together. Clever.
my my..raw, poignant..i like this! real stuff!! I agree with Adam..CREATIVE one shot indeed :))
What creativity! Sounds like Bukowski, looks like Cummings...love it!
Awesome idea and the result is fab!
ha. you are brilliant...love the mimcry of style and the semi colon rocks it...tight write...nice one shot!
I agree. Really cool and imaginative. Pleasing to the eyes as well. Great writing.
Nice structure:D totally love word your words=3~ very creative and interesting=D
That was just too cool!!
How do you do the lines like that? Teasing like?
interesting provocative style and yet uncluttered and raw ... i like
This was terrific. I loved the structure. And I felt so bad for that poor unsuspecting woman.
very interestingly written and very creative! great one shot!
Cool write...I was wondering if this was another style of poetry.
This was awesome. Really enjoyed reading it, thanks.
steven - that was fantastic - wow!
Beautiful...
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
Stylistic brilliance. Great One Shot. Love and Light, Sender
Great visual poetry. Liked the flow!
nowhere island
Excellent, masterful blend of two distinctive poets.
Fascinating poetic mashup. Kudos!
It's hard to do that eecummings stuff I think. Yours far more successful than mine. I think you captured the Bukowski spirit too. It has withitall a Damon-Runyan effect..."got a horse right here, etc.." Cool to get that much in few words. Extremely poetic. Thank you. Gay (@beachanny)
a very creative structure to this.. well done..!
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Ha ha! FUN! (And by the way, I love your tagline).
this was so very well done...a really enjoyable read...cheers pete
Creative.......well done
love the way your words wiggle both in physical form and in poetic form.
beautiful entry.
simply and to the point, yet long in thought nice work oneshot
Very clever and very well done.
Comes out effotless - Did the words pour out in a great big rush or did you have to labour throught it?
It's too lovely - for words.
This is your realm -- where you excel, there is no other in our poetry united groups that can do this as well as penned here.
Ingenious --
Joanny
http://thedowsersdaughter.blogspot.com/
woah-- hit me! this verse inhabits its space completely. congrats!
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Loved the style and the tribute to these poets was marvelous
Thanks for sharing with One Shot
Moon smiles
Great combination of poets. I loved the style,which had much to do with the greatness of the poem. Great One Shot.
I forgot about this one. I like it.
Two of my my favorite poets written by a third.
Nice,
eden
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