Thursday, September 20, 2012

La Cantera


La Cantera

I remember that Friday night,
as I drove in circles, wasting rental gas,
and obsessively checking my watch.
Three hours from DC to San Antonio
plus the 5 months since you said goodbye.
I never told you how I cried and tried
to hate you, because when I saw you walk
through security 147 days dissolved,
like a sugar cube on my tongue.

And I remember Saturday night too,
after 18 holes, a delicate petite syrah
and two of the best damn steaks in Texas,
we laughed, drank XO and smoked Cohibas.
When you excused yourself for a moment,
every last man watched you catwalk out,
and then turned to me and said
“boy you’re one lucky sombitch”
I just gave them a nod and a smile,
because they had no idea how lucky I was.

*(Re-print from "Another Hotel Room")

29 comments:

Timoteo said...

No idea...but I can imagine!

Maureen said...

I like all the details in this and the great turn at the end of the poem.

Beachanny said...

Loved this, so gritty and real. I, of course, know that place, that airport, the restaurant and the steaks. Yeah, you captured love, ambience and Texas in one. Well done, you! Thanks, Gay

Brian Miller said...

ha. i will gladly be a lucky SOB in that kinda situation...melts like a sugar cube on my tongue...nice. great one shot!

Desert Rose said...

don't know the places but i enjoyed the poem, nice one shot!

dustus said...

Ha! What a play on words to end all the speaker's waiting.. Great details throughout the poem. Thanks for an excellent One Shot! cheers

gautami tripathy said...

I liked the fine detailing very much.

ode to un-puntuated verses

betweenhearts75 said...

Wow fascinating write... definitely agree with Gay on this "gritty" yet suave style of writing. Real impressions of heartache, and passion with the realisms. Well-done! =))

KB said...

Sounds like a perfect evening.

Glynn said...

I read this, and I'm glad I ordered the book from Amazon. This is a gem.

senderupwords said...

Love it. This made me smile from ear to ear and I don't even like golf. ;) Love and Light, Sender

moondustwriter said...

the tempo on this was - hot!!!
maybe two months next time

Great One shot my friend

moon smiles

Steve said...

Romantic, a tad melancholic, good distinctive images/ideas, effective.

Shashi said...

Bautiful...
The 147 days disolved and you cat walk out... what beautiful words..

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Jingle said...

lovely ending,
Glad to see you feel lucky.
cheers1
pleasant entry.

Claudia said...

love the pace and masculinity
in this piece - and ...like a sugar cube on my tongue…makes me faint
think i will place an order at amazon as well...

RiikaInfinityy said...

Sounds like a fun trip...:P nicely written!^^~

Eric Alder said...

I seem to be running into steaks today... man, I'm hungry!

Nice One Shot!

Monkey Man said...

Lust well penned. I also pulled one out of the drawer for One Shot. My "Tick Clack" One Shot is HERE.

Collective Epiphanies said...

An engaging piece. Reflective w/good imagery. A bold and imaginative style.

Pete Marshall said...

i could feel texas in this...and boy would i have drawled!!!! great one shot...pete

Cindybrown said...

VEry nice!

Daniel Jay said...

I especially liked the unique details that brought originality:
the rental gas, the wine, and the dissolve - set the tone for the rest of the poem.

Very nice SMG!

Victoria/liv2write said...

18 holes, a steak, Shiraz and someone to love. A wonderful day well-expressed.

Jeffrey Miller said...

Nice one Steve.

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Theron Kennedy said...

This is my favorite by you so far. Metaphors for all five senses. Impressive.

Eden Baylee said...

Sweeeeeet! I'm swooning ;)
eden

Obsidian Eagle (ItzQuauhtli) said...

This is truly excellent. Tells a great story in only two stanzas. Shine on!

Tom Poet said...

Bad ass writing, straight from the heart and I hate golf.