La Cantera
I remember that Friday night,
as I drove in circles, wasting rental gas,
and obsessively checking my watch.
Three hours from DC to San Antonio
plus the 5 months since you said goodbye.
I never told you how I cried and tried
to hate you, because when I saw you walk
through security 147 days dissolved,
like a sugar cube on my tongue.
And I remember Saturday night too,
after 18 holes, a delicate petite syrah
and two of the best damn steaks in Texas,
we laughed, drank XO and smoked Cohibas.
When you excused yourself for a moment,
every last man watched you catwalk out,
and then turned to me and said
“boy you’re one lucky sombitch”
I just gave them a nod and a smile,
because they had no idea how lucky I was.
*(Re-print from "Another Hotel Room")
29 comments:
No idea...but I can imagine!
I like all the details in this and the great turn at the end of the poem.
Loved this, so gritty and real. I, of course, know that place, that airport, the restaurant and the steaks. Yeah, you captured love, ambience and Texas in one. Well done, you! Thanks, Gay
ha. i will gladly be a lucky SOB in that kinda situation...melts like a sugar cube on my tongue...nice. great one shot!
don't know the places but i enjoyed the poem, nice one shot!
Ha! What a play on words to end all the speaker's waiting.. Great details throughout the poem. Thanks for an excellent One Shot! cheers
I liked the fine detailing very much.
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Wow fascinating write... definitely agree with Gay on this "gritty" yet suave style of writing. Real impressions of heartache, and passion with the realisms. Well-done! =))
Sounds like a perfect evening.
I read this, and I'm glad I ordered the book from Amazon. This is a gem.
Love it. This made me smile from ear to ear and I don't even like golf. ;) Love and Light, Sender
the tempo on this was - hot!!!
maybe two months next time
Great One shot my friend
moon smiles
Romantic, a tad melancholic, good distinctive images/ideas, effective.
Bautiful...
The 147 days disolved and you cat walk out... what beautiful words..
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lovely ending,
Glad to see you feel lucky.
cheers1
pleasant entry.
love the pace and masculinity
in this piece - and ...like a sugar cube on my tongue…makes me faint
think i will place an order at amazon as well...
Sounds like a fun trip...:P nicely written!^^~
I seem to be running into steaks today... man, I'm hungry!
Nice One Shot!
Lust well penned. I also pulled one out of the drawer for One Shot. My "Tick Clack" One Shot is HERE.
An engaging piece. Reflective w/good imagery. A bold and imaginative style.
i could feel texas in this...and boy would i have drawled!!!! great one shot...pete
VEry nice!
I especially liked the unique details that brought originality:
the rental gas, the wine, and the dissolve - set the tone for the rest of the poem.
Very nice SMG!
18 holes, a steak, Shiraz and someone to love. A wonderful day well-expressed.
Nice one Steve.
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This is my favorite by you so far. Metaphors for all five senses. Impressive.
Sweeeeeet! I'm swooning ;)
eden
This is truly excellent. Tells a great story in only two stanzas. Shine on!
Bad ass writing, straight from the heart and I hate golf.
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