SimplicitySunday morning--
sunlight chases tiny rabbits
across the bedroom floor,
and you are beautiful
in the shadows.
Blankets pulled overhead
keep Saturday night’s toll
at bay for the moment,
and you are enticing
in the goose down.
Newsprint smudged
fingers fetch aspirin
with sparkling water back,
and you are sexy
in the naked daylight.
I fell in love with you
on just such a morning,
3000 miles to the west,
and you were beautiful
in the retreating fog.
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Romantic, tastefully erotic, strong use of concrete details and metaphorical notions.
Sweet...foggy days and foggy brains...I know them well.
Nice piece - vivid - clear - totally dig it.
hot and muggy, extremely apt write for the day ;) I'm now suitably warmed up!
Oh I know this feeling.
Thank you for the sentiment of my city - she is a beauty
I'm sure the lady is too
Love the double meaning - you have to live there to feel that blanket being pulled over you each night (albeit a cold and wet one)
Nice One Shot
Moon smiles
This is beautiful...what a love poem. I could feel it.
Ya know what happens in the fog dont ya!
Nostalgic and romantic. Nice.
A lovely piece...love the moment and you captured it so well.
awe you left your heart there...many do...beautiful write
"keep Saturday night's toll at bay"...great line...bkm
Love the newsprint smudged fingers. Nice strong image!
You've made me sigh a deep sigh, missing both San Francisco and Sunday morning sunlight.
i loved the love story entwined within this piece...and loved the chasing of rabbits...that pulled me in...amazing photo..must say..cheers pete
A beautiful write, so well expressed.
Anita.
A sweet and simple ode to your love. Nice One Shot!
Nice imagery and lovely image.
A favorite, I feel like I am in a set of a movie
Very sweetly written Steven. I don't think I've read much in the way of romance in your work, but you expressed beautifully in this! ~April
Now I miss SF and all it offers from the fog to the romance to the endless possibilities.
Beautiful.
I think this is one of the most beautiful romantic poems i have ever read! Truly lovely Steven!
love how this melts together..just like the fog..and in the end, you can't say anymore where one ends and the other starts..
Just beautiful!Makes you want to fall in love,again!
Your pic made me love your words before I read it!And I was right!Both are beautiful!I can picture every word!
As I was reading I kept on getting flashes that I was watching an old black and white detective story, your words being the talk-over while he walks down the street. Loved the image it created and the mood!
I enjoyed the simplicity of it all... and your words..
'and you are sexy
in the naked daylight.
I fell in love with you
on just such a morning,'
... created the perfect image of your thoughts... a memory fading away on the fog...
Thanks for sharing...
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Om Namah Shivaya
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I really love this: romantic, vivid, just excellent. I wrote something on this theme a while back--would love to share:
http://heathergracestewart.com/2009/02/10/in-the-early-morning-hush/
Thanks for your beautiful word-picture.
Talent, that is all I can say
this was beautifully written
This piece sizzles with eroticism... yet your imagery is just as intense. Well done.
Wonderful work, can feel the warmth and desire you have for your city.
Simple, sincere, romantic:)
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