Monday, April 9, 2012

ee Bukowski

ee Bukowski

I pick-
ed
****up
thisextordinarywoman
(at
the track)
She
was new
toall
*****this bet
ting ******the ponies
****shit
and so (by
the
way)
impressed she was
with my
***********prowess
that
*****she
gave me
*****allofher;
money which I
lost
as quick
ly
as
I had
my own

SMG

38 comments:

dustus said...

Love it! Cool homage combining two gigantic poetic influences. Thanks for the creative One Shot!

Glynn said...

I missed the photo on the lft -- as I rerad it I thought this reminded me of e e cummings -- and then Adam's note filled the gap. I really like this.

signed...bkm said...

Love it...all of it..great read and write...bkm

Just Me said...

Very cool poem combining the two poets together. Clever.

Desert Rose said...

my my..raw, poignant..i like this! real stuff!! I agree with Adam..CREATIVE one shot indeed :))

Timoteo said...

What creativity! Sounds like Bukowski, looks like Cummings...love it!

Neva Flores said...

Awesome idea and the result is fab!

Brian Miller said...

ha. you are brilliant...love the mimcry of style and the semi colon rocks it...tight write...nice one shot!

emmettwheatfall.com said...

I agree. Really cool and imaginative. Pleasing to the eyes as well. Great writing.

RiikaInfinityy said...

Nice structure:D totally love word your words=3~ very creative and interesting=D

Cindybrown said...

That was just too cool!!

Kathleen Overby said...

How do you do the lines like that? Teasing like?

the wid0w said...

interesting provocative style and yet uncluttered and raw ... i like

TALON said...

This was terrific. I loved the structure. And I felt so bad for that poor unsuspecting woman.

lifeloveandmisery said...

very interestingly written and very creative! great one shot!

Emmanuel Ibok said...

Cool write...I was wondering if this was another style of poetry.

forpuck said...

This was awesome. Really enjoyed reading it, thanks.

Claudia said...

steven - that was fantastic - wow!

Shashi said...

Beautiful...
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya

senderupwords said...

Stylistic brilliance. Great One Shot. Love and Light, Sender

gautami tripathy said...

Great visual poetry. Liked the flow!

nowhere island

Steve said...

Excellent, masterful blend of two distinctive poets.

Ben Langhinrchs said...

Fascinating poetic mashup. Kudos!

Beachanny said...

It's hard to do that eecummings stuff I think. Yours far more successful than mine. I think you captured the Bukowski spirit too. It has withitall a Damon-Runyan effect..."got a horse right here, etc.." Cool to get that much in few words. Extremely poetic. Thank you. Gay (@beachanny)

Leo said...

a very creative structure to this.. well done..!

My 1 Shot

Belinda Munoz said...

Ha ha! FUN! (And by the way, I love your tagline).

One Stop - The Place For Poets, Writers & Artists said...

this was so very well done...a really enjoyable read...cheers pete

Whitesnake said...

Creative.......well done

Jingle said...

love the way your words wiggle both in physical form and in poetic form.
beautiful entry.

Kodjo Deynoo said...

simply and to the point, yet long in thought nice work oneshot

Maureen said...

Very clever and very well done.

ninotaziz said...

Comes out effotless - Did the words pour out in a great big rush or did you have to labour throught it?

It's too lovely - for words.

joanny said...

This is your realm -- where you excel, there is no other in our poetry united groups that can do this as well as penned here.

Ingenious --

Joanny
http://thedowsersdaughter.blogspot.com/

mairmusic said...

woah-- hit me! this verse inhabits its space completely. congrats!
http://mairmusic.wordpress.com/

moondustwriter said...

Loved the style and the tribute to these poets was marvelous

Thanks for sharing with One Shot

Moon smiles

Cor said...

Great combination of poets. I loved the style,which had much to do with the greatness of the poem. Great One Shot.

Khakjaan Wessington said...

I forgot about this one. I like it.

Eden Baylee said...

Two of my my favorite poets written by a third.

Nice,
eden