Tuesday, June 26, 2012

Sunset at Trestles


Sunset at Trestles

Daylight danced
with lengthening shadows
along the strand
as night pushed
slowly down
toward the horizon.

Eight hours
of waves and sun
had washed away
the work week, and
we collapsed in sandy piles
of smiles and salty skin.

Driftwood smoke
mingled with
misty sea air,
the sun teased,
then fell into
a waiting ocean.

I kissed you
for the first time,
and when the moon
winked from the East,
I thought that we
might fall in love.

The fire burned down to embers.

I searched for wood to stoke it.

SMG

27 comments:

signed...bkm said...

lovely and there is nothing like a beach at night in San Diego....you have a home run...bkm

Brian Miller said...

oh stoke that fire...great imagery..love the sandy piles of smiles...happy one shot!

Fireblossom said...

"the sun teased,
then fell into
a waiting ocean"

That set of lines has no business being as effective as it is. They're my favorite lines in the poem.

That said, I'm sighing over the last line. Yeah. *sigh*

Desert Rose said...

soo refreshing..i love beaches and especially with fire on..that one is really lovely!

dustus said...

You bring the poem down to a gut level through the flow of images of the beach and ocean, framing it by time cherished out of the workweek, with great sensory detail and sadness... great one shot!

moondustwriter said...

Ah love by the Pacific ocean ...
There's too much there not to be something.

Nice One Shot

Moon smiles (down on lovers ya know)

Pete Marshall said...

hi steve...what a great relaxing day spent here..captured so masterly..think you sold san diego to me..cheers pete

Claudia said...

oh yes - stoke that fire...we collapsed in sandy piles
of smiles and salty skin...this sounds just too good!!!

Magnus Holmgren said...

Beautiful...you paint such lovely images here...just beautiful :)

Beachanny said...

Compact, taut and beautiful imagery. You capture the tingle of first love and the longing for it to go on and on and on. Lovely. Thanks. Gay

ChristeeneFraser said...

This is just gorgeous. Captures both the essence of the seaside and longing and uncertainty (I thought we might fall in love). Fantastic!

PattiKen said...

So romantic. I love the sandy piles of smiles and salty skin. And that picture is amazing.

joanny said...

Versatile poet you are, each time you delight and surprise me with your penned ingenious poems.

Cheers,
Joanny
http://thedowsersdaughter.blogspot.com/

Wild Rose said...

Marty very romantic piece and beaches are my other love it's so beautiful written..my favorite lines..

"I kissed you
for the first time,
and when the moon
winked from the East,
I thought that we
might fall in love."

Just perfect!

willow said...

I adore the notion of the moon winking. Beautiful, romantic piece.

faery of the wilds said...

beauty, passion and some belief... nice

Khakjaan Wessington said...

Aww, you're such a sap! I'm sorry I missed this one. It's really good.

Glynn said...

Good poem. Truly good poem.

ZeR0BaCkUp said...

Nice! Especially the last lines...

Eden Baylee said...

I can smell your poem. Beautiful.
eden

Christopher Kerry Scott Sophie Johnson said...

romantic moment captured.

Amelia Googles Sharon-Stein Wilson said...

very passionate.

Madeline Terry Camille Nat Brownback said...

no wood, no burns,
let it be,
be happy.

Benji Barratt Clark Twohill Sullivan said...

powerful...

Layne Gerald Wade Cutts Hansen said...

lovely sentiments.

Sheryl David Tanya Page Raun said...

beach is a place for romance i guess.
love the ending line.

Mimi Brad Sheng Pallin Henry said...

wonmderful.