This is my god and I carry him round
I keep him boxed so he's easily found
Given to me when I was a young fool
I learned about boxes in parochial school
All life's questions are all answered for me
in a book the box factory gives away free
I go through life with their words on my lips
my mind is in neutral so my tongue often slips
Many a man will let his god run around
I fear this behavior is truly not sound
My god kicks, screams and tries to get out
but he's safer in there I have little doubt
I'd let him loose but I'm afraid I'd abhor
life with a god not contained in cardboard
SMG
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This RULES! LOL
ha. god is easier to handle in cardboard, that is for sure...ha...at least you acknowledge a god though...see this is what happens in those schools...just saying...
i myself never made bad experiences with nuns but my colleague went to a catholic kindergarten and the nuns were so bad that he left the house in the morning and spent the day in the forest instead...fun in a way but so sad..ugh... god in a box is no good thing.. can't say much rgd. allits as i never do them consciously...learning though...but will leave it to tony...smiles
nice rhythms and good sense of a child's nursery rhyme here; it certainly harkens back, and renews each of our particular adolescent introduction to AllThatIs, or God, or gods, or Allah, or Yahweh.
Very nice rhythm to this as Glenn points out. I have been safe from that type of God.. A blessed secular child-hood despite plenty of Lutheran priests around.
Very hard to maintain a steady cadence of stressed syllables as you develop a poem. This was a very cool exercise.
There's a nice rhythm and rhyme in this poem, which, paradoxically, is almost exactly the opposite of what the challenge asks for.
As to your subject, well, too many people want God/god to be safe and comfortable. For me, the creator and sustainer of the universe could hardly be safe ... unless he/she chooses to be.
I really enjoyed this piece.>KB
I really liked the thrust of tone in this piece.>KB
I really liked the thrust and tone of this piece.>KN
I really liked the thrust and tone of this piece.>KB
I really liked the thrust and tone of this piece.>KB
I really liked the thrust and tone of this piece.>KN
I really liked the thrust and tone of this piece.>KB
Sorry for the multiple comment but I was having problems getting the code thgrough
Since I failed the task in the first go around: http://stevenmgrant.wordpress.com/2013/07/11/as-the-spirit-wanes-the-form-appears/
Yep. I'm a product of Catholic education, too...
Ha ha... Clever. I'm the product of public schools. I don't think I got the raw end of the deal.
Right. You are pointing at "it". Jesus is made an idol and there is no urge to *show* love. People rather make a show of love.
Nice rhythm and rhyme. :-)
God bless you. Stay cool in the turmoil. :-)
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I wonder how many S & M freaks those nuns created.
ha, very cool... i thoroughly enjoyed this one, expecially the cardboard line. a great piece
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